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Excuse me, my sweet;

Dare I be so bold as to tell you how I feel:
How I long to hold you once more?

Whisper sweet everythings
through the breath of a soul set ablaze.

And how
much like the ardent core of the stars
that scatter the darkness of the night sky
I burn for you!

To again,
gaze upon eyes that could compromise
even the most stubborn of my frowns.

A smile that radiates obligation,
in which my lips succumb,
and follow suit in accordance.

Yes, even to experience--
by the slightest of your touch--
an encore of articulation gone awry
embodied in a fidgety nervousness.

Ambiguity fills the air
and with great continence I speak not,
unto you,
what I wish I had the courage to say:

"Be mine."

"Be mine!"

"And allow me to be yours."
©2008-2009 ~vampchyld
:iconvampchyld:

Author's Comments

As always, advanced critique is wanted and appreciated. Also, if anyone can think of a better category for this to go in. let me know.

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I'll make some proposals later but since I got little time now I'd like to let you know that it sounds beautiful and very expressive. I like it a lot!
Wonderful choice of words!

--
With your back against the wall, there is at least something to lean against.
:iconvampchyld:
Thank you very much. That is great to hear. It's short, I know, but I worked hard on this piece.

--
"Be who you are and say what you think, because those who mind dont matter, and those who matter dont mind" -Dr. Suess

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